Ok this poem is slightly out of the ordinary, not my kinda thing but yeah i guess i was needing my dose of 'moods', if you know what i mean ;) ehm! So here you go, have fun and all your precious comments are most welcome!
Under a dark and dreamy moonlit night
You walked past me like a shimmering light
Your body so tantalizing, oh I could see
I still hold your image deep down inside of me
You held me close to you in my wicked dream
I knew in ecstasy I could almost scream
I breathe into the lustful scent of you
You touched my soul, I’m stained by you
Your soft skin whispers miracles into me
Your eyes drown me into an ocean deep
So seductive the way your body moves
Every inch of me giving in to the groove
Your luscious lips teasing over my skin
Tormenting, getting lost deep within
Your gentle kisses levitating me above
Exciting, enthralling we are making love
Come, shower me your desires onto me
Let me take you to the world of dark fantasy
Move it down, take it slow, this is where I wanna be
Oh baby, can’t you see, you’re intoxicating me!
58 comments:
OMG! sooooo descriptive i felt like i just watched a romanic movie wow wow ... bow to u baby ... ur writing is gettin 'hotter' by the day! and the last two lines am sure any guy will get turned on just by reading it ..ahem! oh my gosh.. m yet to get over it, i cud c every line u described not every writer can do this!
It's like watching soft porn!
:sheepish laughing:
>lucifer
@ sans
lol... thanks a lot babe.. dunno why this came to my mind at the first place.. :D thought i really needed to take a break and write something diff.. so this is wat came out! :D so u let your imagination flow baby, u're doing jus fine.... :D :D :>
@ luci
hehe... see the insult!!
btw... sans said its like a romantic movie... n luci says a porn!! omg... am NOT putting up any show here ppl!! grrrr >.< :(
"@ sans
lol... thanks a lot babe.. dunno why this came to my mind at the first place.. :D thought i really needed to take a break and write something diff.. so this is wat came out! :D so u let your imagination flow baby, u're doing jus fine.... :D :D :> "
.. wow that's quite a paradoxical spectrum !!
wonder what's going on in your dome now ?!?
>lucifer
was there neone around when you wrote this?? :P
i totally accept with lucifer... thank god it was just words and not a video... you know on second thoughts i would have preferred it to be a movie :D ... nice work...
@ luci
dai... stop copy pasting comments now... thas my work! :P btw... if you thought something's cooking up real hot this side... keep guessing bro... keep guessing!! :P :P
@ ooooo (??)
thank you... but movie cannot keep up to my standards... so digest this!! :P
I strongly suggest blogger.com to make it mandatory for bloggers to have a rating for their blogs... For a kid like me... i should stop reading with E or at the max PG-13... My mom is strictly agains M blogs...
@ ooo
ur mom's right!! you really need to go to school!! :P
Do they have a school for that?? :O...
too bad my mom is wrong... ya know i can actually teach classes!!!
may be u need a crash course!!
ya know after reading you blog again... i realized you dont need a beginners course.. but then u cant go to a higher level directly.. so may be like a inter couse level??
@blindwreck said -
"thought i really needed to take a break"
- break time la enna idhu ? abacharam abacharam!
hehe..
>lucifer
this is really going crazy, what did oooooooo mean by 'intercourse' class??
Why is the world filled with perverts??? I was talking about intermediate level course in blogging and how to rate them for content :P
hahahahahaha
world filled with perverts?? look who read this poem and preffered to wathc it on a video :P
hahahahahaha
ahem! ahem! Sorry to interrupt the "who is pervert-er" discussion. Why sne, ur churning out poetry after poetry? Whats up? I can see that ut totally high. On wot, may I ask??
Then, did I read luscious lips?? Okay, so this reads like a lesbo porn! Lol!
it's hot when girls discuss porn! that too lesbo porn!
Woo-hoo!
>lucifer
@ oooo
inter course level??? :O :O wat the.....
@ luci
hehe... break time la daan gilmas! wat say :P
@ point
am gonna kill u if u ever move ur butt to chennai neet... its a guy who's sayin those words... gosh, am ruined!! its like a guy describing abt the girl whom he met... n so on and so forth! :D lol.. i was high neet.. on wat? shh... that's a secret! ;)
@ luci
stop ur woo-hoo ing devil.. u are watching too much of porn these days!! take a break! :P
@ ooooo & aaaaah
urggh!! u guys already make this place sound like one filthy local porn movie!! shoo shoo.... ;)
@luceifer
You are a good representative of the male DNA...
@blind
Thanks for clearing who the guy is of the 2...
@point
you must be an expert in this.. i meant the "luscious" part...
@aaahhh
who are u??
there s something wrong then, it sounded like girl describing the guy she met so long until u said its otherways, even i was wondering abotu the "soft skin" whispers and it did sounds like lesbo porn :)
more of porn.. oops poems plz!
@ooooooooo
me? yet another blindwreck's poetry collection fan :)
@ aaaaa
ufffffo! u guys were not getting the flow of the poem! only a genius can get it rite! ahem!!
@ ooohs n aaaahs!
poetry collection fan!! :O
omg... where's that damned pen of mine... am coming am coming! :D :D
oh yeah pick ur pen and get the flow going! we are waiting! :))
btw I prefer romance and soft porn to dark poetry, and am sure the other fans would like it that way too!
why use pen and come.. dont u have better gadgets.... like the keyboard and the computer??
@ aaaa n oooo
am planning to quit! i rest my case!
ahhhhh no! why do great ppl think abt quitting after creating a master piece? :O
@ aaah
now u better tell me who this is!!!
didnt i say that already? a die hard fan of all ur poems! :)
u know what, something that is missing in this is a prologue, on who thse two are (a guy n a gal or 2 gals i dont mind :) ) and what made u write this :D
ohhhh..ahhh..sne thats wondersful work comming out from u..where was all this till now??humm heheh..keep up the good work..let more poems flow...
@ blind
Ok, so now u have a sexual-identity crisis also! Male mind trapped in a female body! ROFL!
@oooohs n aaaaahs
to complete the trio, pls introduce the OUCH too
@ enigma
thanks da... well abt this thing was hiding in me for a long time i guess.. lol.. that's the result u've seen!! :D
@ point
yeah, i guess a major sexual-identity... but nevamind am lovin it! lol... :D
HellooO...read all ur poetry. Brilliant...not saying for any formality.....Really like all.
Keep writing.
Cockroach
@ cockroach
thanks a lot da!
"Especially this kind....mmmmmm!!"
>lucifer
LOL - they sure know how to rub it in don't they. It was quite nicely done this poem. More words and let the people chase their wild dream.
:-), If I were you I would not again bring the romantic side onto the table LOL.. it is quite funny the guys ripped the whole thing apart. I was actually tempted to say a few, but I don't know you so I was guarded :-)
@ vik
i wouldnt mind bringing it over again.. if it ever crosses my mind that is... ;) lol...
i enjoyed the show as much my lovely friends did here.. as long as the show goes on my mate... as long as the show goes on!!
thanks for liking it... am really glad you keep visiting my posts.. but that also gives me pangs of guilt, cos i don visit ur page! :D better late than neva! :)
@ luci
dai... wat was that???
ellam oru gujili dhan..
:)
>lucifer
Oh you aer never going to miss anything even if you did not visit my blog :-) .. It is not all that decorated so I think you are better off with the pen and calm place to think about the next errotic thriller, err i mean poem... :-)
@ vik
lol.. now that actually makes me think.. erotic thriller uh... mmmm sounds realllly nice to me! :D hehe..
anyway thanx for the suggestion :P
lol - sure yes, make it so real and anyway the outcome would be so sidey that you prolly wud be getting more 'love' mails and msgs after that. Better still, make me a protagonist in that poem and finally don't make him die virgin! lol
@ vik
haha... now i really need to spin up a story...
44 comments :O Look at the attraction that semi-porn is pulling!
jst kidding, so when is the next poem releasing?! previews?
Oh yea.. now you talking and am all ears for that story to be up for grabs. Can't say I love my life any more :-]
lol - did you notice every other guy who is getting into this space claims that poem was indeed porn. I wonder why LMAO
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50.... i thought you were waitin for ur 50th comment b4 postin the next one...
:O 50 comments????
jeezz... what was that!
and semi porn, huhh huhh????
sne, u should make a porn movie next! look how u attracting ppl to ur porn poem??
@ point
yeah babe... maybe wen i find some hot chicks like u!! :P
Do you need someone to star in ur movie?? I can check my schedule and let ya know!!! :P
@ anon
huhhh?? chk ur schedule?? uhh... am looking for some HOT ppl here!! :P
babe, I ve tagged u1 come to my blog n pick it up!
babe, i can help u here.. just check out those qstns in my blog - 8 things, 8 songs etc etc.. answer them in ur blog and tag 8 other ppl.. by t wy i already tagged swar, arun n kel.. lol! so find other 8 ppl
LOL - it is like sensual seduction when neets writes and obviously the poem writer takes the pie and runs the distance.
I liked what you had to say about PB (lets be discrete) LOL
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